Narrative

This week I have been writing my draft 3 narrative. My story is called Oscar and Alphonse.  Here's what it is looking like so far.

Oscar and Alphonse

draft 3

There lived a girl named Molly.  She loved bugs. Molly lived in a very big house in the country.   

Molly was not allowed allowed outside but she could  sneak out when  know one is there.

That day she found some caterpillars in her room.  They had all these unusual colours.  She wanted to keep the caterpillars so she could  them grow.     

She also wanted to see them make their cocon.  She realised they can’t grow our make a cocoon without food so she had to figure out what to do.   So she walked around the hole house to find a plant to put the caterpillars in.   She couldn’t find anything to put the the caterpillars.   She thinked in her head if she knew if their was a plant that is good and safe for caterpillars.   She figgered out an idea,she could ask her parents if they can  take her to a plant store.   They said “tomorrow in the afternoon  why do you want to go.”    

Because our class is growing a caterpillar garden.

" What caterpillars are they going to be?.”asked Molly in her head

I think they can be any kind she said     

"How about we can go to the shop now her mum said.

“Ahhh ok where are we going?” Molly asked her parents.     

“ To the plant store like you asked us” dad explained

Now hop in the car before it shuts .      

“How long to we are there” Molly asked    

“One hour.”

One hour later,

”where there!.”       

“So where is the caterpillar plants?.  

“Over there.”   

Molly’s parents get that plant.   They went to by the caterpillar plant.   Then they  arrived home,   I put all the caterpillars on my plant.  Mum asked me what day it will be and I had know I deer what to say.          

Days after that day all the caterpillar were super fat.  One even was making a cocon

It was a very bright cocoon like all these rainbow colours.  All the avers are eggzakly the same.  She couldn’t whaite to the caterpillars become butterflies.  Most of the caterpillars were already in their cocoons and Molly was getting really bored from waiting for the caterpillar to grow out of their cocoons.   There were flies eating some of the caterpillars.

Molly was not happy so she went to sneaked out to find something to protect the caterpillars.

When she walked thru the hallway she saw her her her parents.  She tried to not to let her parents see her but they did!.  They asked Molly together “What have you been doing these two day’s a what are you doing now?  Molly had to show them what she had been hiding because she couldn’t keep it a secret any more.  They went upstairs so Molly’s parents what she had been hiding. They weren't in prest so they said “ You need to get them out this instant and Molly said “OK.”  She knew it was time to send them back. The caterpillars softly wiggled in her hand, spelling out

“goodbye.”  

After Molly sanden them back she had tears dripping down her face.  Molly begged for them to come back.   Maybe she might find some more somewhere ales.

                                      THE END